Despite this being a general diss at me, this isn't too bad. You need to get a better mic, like forreal. You are offbeat sometimes, especially on those faster rapped parts. Got a few funny punchlines, and I like the ideas. You getting there bruv
yes we fixed some of the mixing in production, BUT you're spot on with the words. i do have to fit in with the flow, tbh that's why i like it. it's make it fun, also it's not the mic lol. the mic is fine, it's just how he mixed it! but it kinda gives off a weird vibe that i like.
Oh another big thing to add that will help a ton: Find words that fit the rhythm of the rapping. I noticed there are a few words that you pronounce in a way as to fit the rhythm, like lengthening the time it takes to say the word. Either find a flow for that line that compliments the words or swap out words, add, or even take out words that might help with the rhythm or cadence.