you have some cool ideas here! it gets a bit too repetitive and loses its flow at parts, try just adding a bit more variety and maybe play with the structure a little bit. other than that its cool :)
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you have some cool ideas here! it gets a bit too repetitive and loses its flow at parts, try just adding a bit more variety and maybe play with the structure a little bit. other than that its cool :)