I didn't do much really at all except the beginning and the ending, everything else sounded good, so I made this quick edit to it :)

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  • I think though, if you were going to change it, you should have kept it consistant the whole way through, since you changed the beginning, and then put my stuff after it. :)

  • XD Nice. Sounds pretty creepy now XD