It has a nice organic sound but lacks various elements such as a lack of dynamics in the bass range, and muddiness. The melody is cool, actually, but could use more tightening in equalization and compression. Sometimes if your drums or synth are too loud, that overwhelms all other elements in your mix. Excellent work!
Imma give it some crit if thats OK: the melody of that lfo synth sounds a bit incoherent, considering the part that starts at
0:17
, that has something going, I really like it. Next thing id point out is the rave-ish synth you used there, I wouldnt say that it doesnt fit or that its bad, however, it has a bit too much energy for the other elements and it could need a bit of mixing. Id recommend trying to work on some transitional elements, swelling or some filter work, it is a bit tricky.