Get That Close by Mr. Outside

just a lil' electronic music project i started after getting inspired by a jam session i had a few months ago with a close friend of mine XD vocals and the guitars are sung/played by me, and i wrote the lyrics as well ~ lyrics ~ [INTRO] i've figure out what you're doin' keeping me around so you'll stay amused [HOOK] you're not breaking my heart again i'm not letting you get that close you may strip down to your skin but i'm keeping on my clothes [RAP] some say we paint this picture we see on the white blank canvas of reality that we're the authors of this book called life we write a page in it everyday if that's true then why does it seem like everyone else can change the scene into an outcome you never intended you keep it simple but it gets complicated a clash of wills with everyone trying to make their life go how they want i never wanted for us to end but you insisted it's for the best apprehensive i walked away but now you say you want me to stay? love's not a puzzle and it's not a game white or black but i don't do grey

Zir0h

Feb 8, 24

Omg i LOVE THAT RAP PART!!! The name escapes me but this reminds me of an artist i used to avidly listen to back in the day and they had the same style and voice! Im sure you know what im talking about but just wanna say fantastic job there. That part is so solid

Mr. Outside

Feb 8, 24

It appeals to the poet in me because there's so much thought you have to put into the flow and delivery of the lines. And if you can get it down, it can really add a special kind of flair to a track. Especially in EDM

Mr. Outside

Feb 8, 24

THANK YOU! I don't do much rapping, but it's fun. I have only one other song I've written on guitar where I rap while I'm playing

Zir0h

Feb 8, 24

Those chords in the begging sound off, i like the rhythm but i think you need to add another note to the top of that chord, it sounds a bit flat amd the vocals too on some parts. I wish i was a vocalist so i could offer real constructive feedback but i have none atm so i shall just point it out and leave the rest to you

Mr. Outside

Feb 8, 24

Yeah this is one of the ones I wanna revamp. During the time I wrote this song, I had completely rewritten the 1st verse, changed some lines in the chorus, reworked the rap lyics a bit and done a bunch of shit with the guitarist in my band. I had plans to fully re-track the vocals, improve the song structure, and go all out. But I haven't revisited the draft in nearly a year to really begin implementing those changes. It might be the next thing I do tbh, because it has a lot of potential