yo thi sis really fucking good the only hting i have to say is that the melodies are kinda weird, a lot of strange melodic choices that i think when cleaned up would bring an already great track to anothe rlevel
i lay here, drowning in the smoke and ash of the fire blazing around me, the tree falling over as the flames raged on, the flowers burning up, the ground piling with dark ash. i though i could count on them all if something had happened. but they all went with [her] instead, leaving me in the middle of the fire [she] started. leaving me to clean up the mess. leaving everything we built for years behind, in favor of [her]. every day, they're all leaving one by one, watching the fire envelop me. it's only a matter of time before all that's left is blackened wood, and a charred corpse. my only wish is that in the end, everything [she] took from me turns on her in the end. despite how far fetched that wish may be, it's all i could hope for as my skin starts to burn, the smell of searing flesh floating over the garden mixed with the aroma of burning wood and grass.
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there's so many things wrong with this but the idea is so great
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i do appreciate that you took the time to listen, and i appreciate you leaving some feedback, that, on almost any other song, i would go fix immediately
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all great feedback, however, i've achieved the sound *i wanted* for this track, most of the things you mentioned, were *intentional* done or left how they were for a reason, and as i stated in update log 4, i will not be updating this any further. however, you're more than welcome to open remix and re-imagine this to how you see fit! :>
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Great stereo, I love how it transitions into the second part but the guitar is a bit off key on some parts overall nice vibe it just needs a bit more work, solid track man.
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update log 4 [FINAL]
- tiny mixing adjustments
- finished adding ear candy
- tiny little eq adjustment on the tearout gun
- made my tag a little louder
- master chain tweak (removed wave shaper as it was fucking the quieter sections of the track)
- bass automation changes
- garden.mp4
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this is the definitive version of the track, and i will not republish it again. this track has been so fun to work on, as it has been an emotional journey for me. all while working on this song, i slowly watched my friend group leave me behind in favor someone who i had chosen to cut ties with, so to say i put my soul and heart into this, is a genuine understatement. so many nights working on this. so many tears shed. so much pain channeled into this track which i now consider to be my best track as of yet. so please, enjoy your listen, i hope you can hear and feel the suffering this track as bear witness too. i love you all and have a good day<3
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update log 3
- added crushed pulv scream bass
- cleaned up the mix a little more, especially in the tearout section
- messed around with the original sounds i used from client's track
- finally made the trap section sound somewhat complete
- tiny master changes + compression
- snare mixing
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update log 2
- updated the trap section with a new snare and some new elements to bring up the energy and give it some more full-ness
- slight mixing changes
- a few transitions to help things feel smoother
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i hate that snare at 4:12
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kick the high end down on the snare too, iiiiif u keep the snare.
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needs either more done with the EQ as far as the low end is concerned. either that or some sort of dubstep snare, not scrillex but something similar, ykwim?
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yeah, i think i might just have to completely redo the snare in that part, i've been fighting with it ever since i made it
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chorus 1 is way too ringy, gotta control the highs on the bitcrusher
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a couple tweaks
- transition bs before the drop
- removed vocal bs
- attempt at fixing the ringy-ness in the drop
- tried to clean up the drums in the trap section
more to come, be patient
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way underappreciated
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1:54 , Is my favorite part. This is very good so far, Keep up your good work.
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I wont listen to this until it's finished
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Wow.
