The melody has a lot of questionable note choices. Just because a note is "in key" doesn't mean that it's properly contextualized in the progression, if that makes any sense. First of all, the detune is a little too strong. Second, consider working more to highlight the color tones of each chord in your melody.
When they are lying me down in my grave let this song play for all who attend my funeral
refaveeeeee
this is really nice man, nostalgia's rushing back... are we still doing arctic fire? c;
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The melody has a lot of questionable note choices. Just because a note is "in key" doesn't mean that it's properly contextualized in the progression, if that makes any sense. First of all, the detune is a little too strong. Second, consider working more to highlight the color tones of each chord in your melody.
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