Well, that depends on what your trying to express. Though, the aesthetics of Juke and Plunderphonix are hard to describe, I think you did a nice enough job at emulating them here. Really, the only thing I can recommend is that you try to expand on this by lengthening it to include new bars and rhythms in it (experiment with bass kicks or stereo on the sample, pitch shift the samples, silence the opiqity sample on some bars, etc)