The most prominent issue is mixing. Your kick is too loud in the buildup, the basses sit just far back in the mix enough to not deliver that intense wow impact I hear you trying to get across. Sound design wise, this track is really great! It's biggest issue is the consistency of the mix. I hear a lot being drowned out behind the complex and overloaded bass wall. Simply, mix is too warm.
i mix with three headphones and my speakers my akgs Audio-Technica and a pair of Bluetooth ones i use for work but also my m-audio graphite 6 1/2 inch speakers does wonders for my mix but honestly best way to test out a mix is play it in a car
Here's a mixing tip that I do. Mix and listen with multiple headphones and sources. I have a pair of headphones that mix brightly and that's generally what I use to start first then my everyday headphones to mix the basses and lower mids to fill out. I swap back and forth to find that good balance. If it sounds good across multiple systems, you're set.
this is my new favorite jovee track. the drop is too quiet tho. like the build is louder lol. in fact id say the whole thing is a bit quiet. except the build. but holy jesus i love this